the Sun is in your Eyes, the Sun is in your Ears...

[YamiJared]

dude, it's going to be LOOOOOOOONG! I don't even have the time to rack up how long this'll be

[kageko]

Oooo @_@+ Maha took Aura away! I am eager to see what will happen next! xD Keep up the good work!

[YamiJared]

eh, sorry everyone, but I can't finish this, I'm sorry, the musing is gone, I no longer have the great vision T.T I may try and ressurect it one day, but now, it'll have to slumber sorry T________T

[kageko]

Oh...>_<... Don't be so sad. I hope the musing will come back someday...Q__Q The story was still a good piece of work. We all know that you've worked very hard on it.

[BeoKnight]

WOW. This is really good. VERY VERY GOOD

[YamiJared]

yea, thanks for the support. too bad i'm not finishing it. I'm rewriting it later so it will be better.

[apostle13]

I like this one a bunch, this and The Dude's. But let me add somthing before you remake it/make more(Maybe!?!?!?!??!!?). Add more fighiting.
Right now it's just like:

"Rawr..I'm Gorre RAWR RAWR!!!!!1!!!!11111!11!"
"AURAISARWCXAW!!! *Zap with bracelet*"

Continued in next chapter.

I think it'd be better like this:

"Rawr..I'm Gorre RAWR RAWR!!!!!1!!!!11111!11!"
"AURAISARWCXAW!!! *Insert cool kung-fu fencing stuff with spells here*"

I'm not saying add so much fighting the it takes 5 chapters for a battle to finish a fight(*cough*DBZ*cough*), but just add a little more.

But that's just my opinion ^^;.

[YamiJared]

ehh....I'm not good at describing fights, besides, fighting is never a focus for my stories. that's the main reason why i ended this one, because it was too straining to come up with fighting scenes.